Well the wind sweeps you off your feet,
You're glistening home, where you belong,
Thunderous sounds, empty desires,
Far from where you stood,
Watching life pass by at the blink of an eye,
The sky is dark at times,
Zoning out, putting yourself behind,
Now doesn't feel right,
Tomorrow's another story.
(slow)
The other,
Makes the best out of every situation,
Skepticism penetrated by optimism,
Well when she breaks down,
She picks herself right where she left off,
No excuses, she knows when she digs herself a hole,
Commiserating, conversations pick off so easily.
(fade out)
Back to the one who's immature,
You're stuck inside your pathetic world,
Where everyone's at your feet,
Controlled to please and obey,
All is good until you're bored,
Manipulating hearts for fun,
Beautiful, life in your eyes,
Preaching the world with chosen words,
Young and naive,
Dumb and beauty,
Stuck inside, empty desires.
(slow)
This girl,
In her green jacket,
Sitting on her own,
So genuine, filled with love,
A mind of her own,
Free as a bird,
Never craves attention,
Just wants someone to hold her,
But not afraid to be alone,
Picks herself up,
Says what's on her mind, everytime,
Others before herself,
Never in a rush,
This girl.
(fade out)
3 comments:
First of all it should be "your" and not "you're" in the first stanza that's what I think...
Second of all I think it's kinda unclear how you go from you in the first stanza, then you speak of someone else but then when you say back to the one who's immature ... WHO is immature, you never stated SHE was in the first stanza... that and like at the same time you say you and then when you say she and she it looks like you're talking about three people. I don't know if that was the intent or if you was supposed to be someone else and there's two people (girls I assume).
It's unclear but you write well.
Sorry for the crit.
Your, you're? What are you talking about? I think it is fine in the first paragraph, unless I missed it.
Ok, as for the lyric, I did not think it would be that confusing. In fact it is one of the least "interpretative" one I've written in a long time. There is NO me in this lyric/poem. None. Basically there are two girls in the picture: one is immature, yet more likely for guys to fall in love (because of appearance); the other girl is mature and, given the chance, better at (intelligent) conversation and spending time with. The only reason I chose to include "the other," & "back to the one that's immature" was to give the idea that I was talking about two different people.
It's not just a poem/lyric about a girl. No. It's more to do with the average guy (and I say average guy because in today's society it is) going after appearance instead of intellectual/personality. The girl that is "immature" relies on her appearance and would be lost by herself. The "mature" girl is somewhat the opposite: she is not ugly by any means, just that guys don't acknowledge her presence because she is shy (etc).
I can go on and on, but I think it's pretty clear what it's about. lol Damn, I think I wrote a lot.
Ah, I see. You meant the third stanza, which is about the same person in the first. "She" turned to "your/you're" in the third stanza. But everything else is self-explanatory :P
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